Essay Evaluation

Criterias for Evaluation

1. Grammar and Syntax: Correct use of grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure.
2. Factual Correctness: Accurate representation of events and any relevant facts.
3. Writing Style: Appropriateness for a Year 6 audience, including creativity and engagement.
4. Plagiarism: Originality of the content.
5. Correspondence to the Topic: Adherence to the prompt of short story writing.
6. Innovative Text Structures: Use of varied sentence structures and creative storytelling techniques.
7. Vocabulary Choices: Use of descriptive language and figurative expressions to enhance the narrative.
8. Complex Sentences: Effective use of complex sentences to elaborate on ideas.
9. Date and Event Accuracy: Ensuring all mentioned dates align with the described events, though specific dates are not provided in the essay.
10. Math Calculations: Verification of any calculations or numerical expressions, if applicable.
11. Definitions: Correct usage of terms and definitions throughout the essay.

Evaluation and Marking

1. Grammar and Syntax

• Score: 8/10
• Comments: The grammar is generally strong, though there are some minor errors (e.g., "principle" should be "principal", punctuation errors, and missing commas).

2. Factual Correctness

• Score: 9/10
• Comments: The events described are plausible though lack specific dates or factual accuracy checks. The context (school speech) is accurately portrayed for a Year 6 student.

3. Writing Style

• Score: 8/10
• Comments: The writing style is enthusiastic and relatable for a Year 6 audience. However, some descriptions could be enhanced further for more vivid imagery.

4. Plagiarism

• Score: 10/10
• Comments: The content appears original and free from plagiarism.

5. Correspondence to the Topic

• Score: 9/10
• Comments: The essay successfully reflects the theme of short story writing, focusing on personal experiences leading up to a speech.

6. Innovative Text Structures

• Score: 8/10
• Comments: The narrative includes some innovative text structures, but further use of metaphors and varied sentence beginnings could enhance innovation.

7. Vocabulary Choices

• Score: 9/10
• Comments: Good experimentation with vocabulary, including phrases like "bundle of nerves." More figurative language could be included to express emotions and settings better.

8. Complex Sentences

• Score: 7/10
• Comments: While some complex sentences are used, there’s room for improvement in sentence variation and length to emphasize ideas.

9. Date and Event Accuracy

• Score: N/A
• Comments: No specific dates are given, making it impossible to assess their accuracy. Overall, events described are typical for a school setting.

10. Math Calculations

• Score: N/A
• Comments: No mathematical calculations are present in the text.

11. Definitions

• Score: 10/10
• Comments: Terms used throughout the essay are appropriate and clearly defined within the context of the narrative.

Overall Score and Comments

Total Score: 81/100 (B)

• The essay is engaging and well-written, appropriate for a Year 6 audience. It provides a relatable narrative emerging from personal experience, addressing the prompts effectively.
• For improvement, focus on enhancing descriptive language, correcting minor grammar issues, and incorporating additional figurative language for a stronger emotional impact.
• Encourage the writer to experiment with various sentence structures and perhaps introduce additional metaphors to boost creativity and engage the reader further.