The essay starts by stating that trends are a normal basis for every living person on earth and that people adapt to them to keep up with the evolving and enhancing taste of the people. However, the introduction lacks a clear thesis statement that establishes the main point of the essay. Additionally, the first sentence is vague and does not clearly establish the central subject of the essay. Therefore, the introduction could be improved by including a clear thesis statement.
The paragraph discusses how people have adapted to trends over time and that they add their own flavor to the already existing trends to last for a long time. The paragraph lacks relevant examples to support the statement, and the idea is not well developed. In addition, the second sentence is grammatically incorrect. It says, "Starting from the first technologies and tools, people adapted the fact of keeping up or joining with the taste of the people and observing as it’s evolving, innovating, and enhancing through the years." The sentence seems to flow better if it is rewritten as, "Starting from the first technologies and tools, people have adapted to the evolving taste of society and observed its evolution, innovation, and enhancement throughout the years by adding their own unique flavors."
The paragraph discusses how trends have become a part of our everyday lives, from traditional hardbound letters to the use of digital technologies. The author suggests that every year, new discoveries become trends that play an invaluable role in economic, social, and communication growth. However, the assertions lack sufficient evidence to support them. Furthermore, the paragraph is not well-organized, as it jumps from the statement that trends have become a part of everyday life to the role they play in economic growth without any transition sentence.
The paragraph discusses the role of trends during the pandemic and how smartphones and the internet enabled people to access education, job opportunities, order food online, and socialize through social media. The paragraph introduces a new idea of pandemic-induced trends. However, the paragraph is somewhat confusing, as it conflates different concepts such as virtual interaction, job opportunities, and education without adequately explaining the connections between them. Additionally, the paragraph is not clear about when the pandemic occurred, which could lead to confusion for the reader.
The paragraph suggests that trends have brought humans to more substantial opportunities and that the pandemic has not divided people but rather brought them closer virtually. The statement lacks clear evidence to support it and is not well-articulated. Moreover, the author uses the term "ideologies of trend" without defining it, which may confuse some readers.
The paragraph concludes by asserting that trends provide innovative tools that contribute to aspects of life such as business, education, communication, and information. However, the statement lacks evidence to support it. Additionally, the paragraph is too short, and the author could provide more examples of how trends have contributed to different aspects of life.
The essay does not have a clear conclusion, and there is no summary of essential points presented in the essay. The author could improve the conclusion by summarizing the main points of the essay and reiterating their relevance to the topic of trends.
The essay mentions the topic of trends but lacks a clear thesis statement and relevant evidence to support the points presented. Moreover, the essay lacks a cohesive organization and development of the ideas presented in the body paragraphs. Along with grammatical errors and lack of clear definitions for some terms, there is overall a significant need for improvement in terms of coherence, evidence-based arguments, and correct language use. Therefore, the essay is awarded a low grade.